Poetry time by Kirsten Bett
In the UK and most of Europe we are missing an hour of sleep... Yes, it's Sunday and yes, it's only a day -- we are not in Stephen King's Insomnia. Thank God. But still. I know I will just have started recovering when we go back to normal time, whatever that might be these days.
Time is strange. Why do writers care what time it is. I get most ideas for poems while nearly sleeping, I think I will remember them, don't get out my notebook but repeat the lines until I fall asleep, like counting sheep. In the morning I slightly remember what it was about... a tree? Well maybe...All those fantastic lines gone. Sometimes a swim -- pre-Covid activity -- will help make the words come back. Sometimes a walk.
Pantoums use repetition in a different way. I got the idea to write a pantoum from Sheena Blackhall's poetry workshop at the conference of the Scottish Writers Association (SAW) last weekend. A pantoum repeats lines in a set format to create a poem that sounds like an incantation. I like to read all poems out loud but pantoums need to be read out loud to get that.
The second and fourth line are used as the first and third line of each following stanza. You end your poem with the first and third line of the first stanza, some people like to turn those around too so you end with the line you started with -- coming full circle. Are you still with me?
I used a pantoum to describe the narrator of the book I am writing. I thought repeating her charasteristics would work well.
Wilma in a pantoum
She taps on your palm, folds around gently.
Gentle purrs beside you, blisser than bliss.
Picture green gold, you're seeing Wilma's eyes.
Rounds you up at 8:30, time for bed.
Gentle purrs beside you, blisser than bliss. Chases leaves, digs up bulbs, tulip field ways. Rounds you up at 8:30, time for bed. Adores tui, black bird, and fantail song.
Chases leaves, digs up bulbs, tulip field ways. In love with vet Tony, he saved her life. Adores tui, black bird, and fantail song. Blends in pittosporum, hides in full view.
In love with vet Tony, he saved her life.
She taps on your palm, folds around gently.
Blends in pittosporum, hides in full view.
Picture green gold, you're seeing Wilma's eyes.
Have you written pantoums? Please send me a link, I'd love to read them!
Comments
I've never heard of this structure, so interesting to learn the ways in which poems are written.
You did a great job with this one!
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