I am the Ghost - Dennis Hamley
How lovely it is to have sudden and unexpected new experiences! I often work with Cherry Mosteshar's agency, The Oxford Editors. I write reports on manuscripts from new authors, which often spill over into a mentoring relationship. On two occasions, rather to my surprise, I've actually put a couple of complete books onto Createspace for authors (not in AE!) who seemed afraid of doing it for themselves, thus being paid for what, to me, was still a learning experience. Still, they seemed happy with the results and duly paid up.
But I never expected the latest assignment which Cherry offered to me. Someone wanted a ghost writer for a whole novel. I gulped at the enormity of such a task, but then, intrigued, I thought 'Oh what the hell' and said yes, of course I'd have a go at it. And it has been - is still being - a fascinating project. I'm helping someone produce a worthwhile result and have a learning experience which I hope and think will serve him well in the future. And at the same time I'm learning a lot about my own writing and also about a process which, after over forty years, I thought I had pretty well sussed.
The writer in question, who has given me full permission to write this blog, has published two books already, with Olympia Publishers. His writing name is Joe Valks. His books are both children's stories. One, The Phantom Dog , is short, hardly ten thousand words. The other, The Last Tiger, is much more substantial. Joe has a special interest in animals and wild life. His ambition is to own a wildlife forest of his own!
A first-person narrative about a boy and his dog. I think this is a beautifully written story about losing and finding. Meanwhile, a reputed half dog, half ghost, locally called 'Bigfoot', is said to stalk the fells, an ever-present danger .
Storm, a young tiger, watches his parents trapped and killed by humans. He starts on a quest, accompanied by his friend Lani, a monkey, to reach a Convention held in a human city to decide the fate of the forest and plead for it to be spared. It is a difficult quest, fraught with danger, but the animals of the forest help them on their way. They reach the Convention, Storm makes a passionate speech and the forest is saved.
I
read them, was impressed and wondered why he thought he needed a ghost writer.
He sent me a statement of what he would prefer, a narrative of about 25,000
words. He said he wanted a third-person point of view and referred me to The Last Tiger for the style and idiom he
would prefer. He sent a detailed synopsis and also a short story exploring
it – which he said (and I had to agree) –
didn’t work (in fact, his description was ‘disastrous’, which I thought something of an overstatement!) However, it did have vivid scenes and effective passages which I thought should appear verbatim in the final result.
The story is called Hunter's Moon. I
found the synopsis fascinating and challenging. It’s certainly not an animal story.
It has an ambitious time-slip - even dimensional-slip - structure. There is
real force and imagination in the cumulative episodes. The central character
has a terminal disease and the main concern for the reader is if he can somehow avoid this inevitable early death.. The present-day
story is set around Cumbria and Northumbria, which Sue
Price has fixed for ever as Reiver country.
The main location is an isolated boarding school, Ridley Hall (I think there
is negotiation needed about this as it seems there is in fact a real Ridley
Hall).
The
school is close to the reputed site of a huge battle between the indigenous people
and the invading Vikings, in which the slaughter was terrific. People say that
the cries of the dying can still be heard. It is a place few wish to visit.
This
sets the time-slip period at between 800 and 900AD. However, there is little
reference to it in the synopsis, because the scene-shifting is not back in time
but to a completely different dimension. The central character (always, in both
the synopsis and the short story, referred to as ‘the ill boy’) actually finds himself transferred
into Norse mythology. He ends up in Valhalla no less, and he has been brought
there to perform what looks to be a pre-ordained but impossible task.
Back in the school, a big project on Vikings is going on. However, it’s turning out to
be no ordinary project. Strange things happen as it progresses, inexplicable phenomena occur, angry and livid skies appear overhead: it is as if another world is trying to break in to the present.
The ill boy has a terrifying dream – or is it a dream? It seems to him like an
actual event he is forced to watch. A young Viking prince is flung into a snake
pit and dies a horrible death. Why, why,
why, the ill boy cries, should he be shown this?
Yes,
the synopsis is certainly powerful, so much so that I nearly interpreted my
task as merely to fill it out into a connected narrative. It would have been a
pretty good story as it stood, though I doubted that it would make 25,000
words, or anything like. But I soon
realised that that wouldn’t do.
The
first question was – why had a boy with a terminal illness, a brain tumour or
an aneurysm, been shoved into a rough-as-guts old place such as a boarding school filled with screaming kids, even though girls were now admitted, and with no particular medical facilities? He surely wouldn’t last ten minutes.
That had to be explained. As a temporary working solution I re-invented the old wicked
step-father cliche, who wants the boy out of the way and forgotten, so he could be alone
with his mother. Not good enough, but it set things in motion.
But
what about this snake pit? It had to
have a real-life counterpart and I must find it. It was here I realised I was
very close to something that has concerned me about the nature of stories ever
since I started writing them. No, I
think it was earlier than that. It was when I started reading them.
Four
years ago I chose twelve ghost stories I’d written since 1984 and put them in a
collection called Out of the Deep, on
Kindle and also in paperback on Createspace. For each story I wrote a postscript, showing what triggered the writing
process, what sort of ghost inhabits the story and where it may sit in the
great pantheon of this mighty genre.
I
have very definite ideas about ghost stories. I know that some people tell me they don’t
agree with them but I remain stubborn. In one of the postscripts I try to illustrate them in a very
cheeky way, by taking a swipe at one of the great classic ghost stories, Whistle and I’ll Come to You, my Lad by M R James.
The ghostly pursuer is a very traditional figure in ghost literature, usually as an agent of revenge, evil intent, fate, nemesis. It’s a staple of ancient Greek culture, most importantly in Sophocles’Oedipus Rex and the Orestiea of Aeschylus. As a concept it’s probably far older. Why? Because it’s an archetypal human feeling, an image of fear as well as a desire for justice which, if humans can’t bring it, must be left to the gods.
In more modern times, MR James depicted the ghostly pursuer in “Whistle and I’ll come to you, my lad.” This is marvellously atmospheric, with another staple of supernatural stories, the “power object”, in this case the whistle which can summon up the pursuing figure.
But in spite of the suspense and terror James, as always, depicts so brilliantly, I can’t help finding this story unsatisfactory. I know that we mustn’t expect everything to be explained in ghost stories: that would defeat their whole purpose. But in the end, the ghostly pursuer is arbitrary: it has no physical or emotional connection with Professor Parkins, the unfortunate picker-up of the whistle on the beach. The professor begins the story ignorant and ends it terrified and mystified. The Colonel’s function is not that of the wise guide who understands but the person with enough knowledge to know that there are things here that no mere human should tamper with. That’s fair enough I suppose, but for me it doesn’t go far enough. I want to know more about the scary tattered figure. I want him significant, not just something to frighten the horses. “There are more things in heaven and earth than are dreamt of in your philosophy, Horatio” is, it seems to me, all right for metaphysical speculation but not, I submit, for satisfying narrative. And I am NOT talking about neatly tied-up, formulaic plots. Satisfying narrative is part of the essence of literary form.
This led me on to something which, as soon as I first read it very many years ago, seemed so exactly right as to not need further argument and which I’ve tried to embody in all my writing.
TS Eliot believed that strong emotion expressed in literature cannot be arbitrary. It must be justified by the facts as we are given them, otherwise it's just emotion expressed for its own sake. He called this justification the objective correlative. I really do think he's right, even in ghost stories. I don't think there's a sufficient objective correlative in Whistle and I'll come to you, my lad to justify any emotion except terror, nor is thee in a lot of Victorian ghost stories.
But in spite of the suspense and terror James, as always, depicts so brilliantly, I can’t help finding this story unsatisfactory. I know that we mustn’t expect everything to be explained in ghost stories: that would defeat their whole purpose. But in the end, the ghostly pursuer is arbitrary: it has no physical or emotional connection with Professor Parkins, the unfortunate picker-up of the whistle on the beach. The professor begins the story ignorant and ends it terrified and mystified. The Colonel’s function is not that of the wise guide who understands but the person with enough knowledge to know that there are things here that no mere human should tamper with. That’s fair enough I suppose, but for me it doesn’t go far enough. I want to know more about the scary tattered figure. I want him significant, not just something to frighten the horses. “There are more things in heaven and earth than are dreamt of in your philosophy, Horatio” is, it seems to me, all right for metaphysical speculation but not, I submit, for satisfying narrative. And I am NOT talking about neatly tied-up, formulaic plots. Satisfying narrative is part of the essence of literary form.
This led me on to something which, as soon as I first read it very many years ago, seemed so exactly right as to not need further argument and which I’ve tried to embody in all my writing.
So
that was it. Hunter’s Moon needed an
objective correlative. The narrative as it stood seemed to me to depict the world
of Norse mythology trying to burst through into our world. Why? I had to find
out.
There are some things I pride myself on knowing a lot about, Gilbert and Sullivan operas for instance, or locomotive superintendents on the railways of Britain from 1829 to 1948. But I can’t say I’m an expert on Norse mythology. Help! I needed to be, quickly.
Well,
here’s the difference between academic research and research for a book. I've
often quoted the great remark of Martin Amis’s, ‘the art of being a novelist is
to appear to know a lot more than you actually do.’ Perfect for the writer,
death for the scholar. Now was the time to put it into operation. And here came
a marvellous phenomenon which I’ve often noticed when researching for a novel.
If you are looking for something specific the answer tends to come almost at the moment you seriously start to look for it. It
rises out of the ruck, gleaming, smiling and ready for use. For me, the prime example of this was when I wrote the 6-novel sequence The Long Journey of Joslin de Lay. I started in a rush, full of stories I couldn't wait to get started on. I had already decided that in each book Joslin would find himself surrounded by murder in every town or city he fetched up in on his journey - except for the last, which would deal with his own mystery. So I began leaving tantalising clues about what this last mystery might be, mainly spoken by his murdered father in his very last, indistinct words. Sadly, I had no idea what they were supposed to mean.
Here's where it started
Well, the fifth was finished and there was no escape. I looked at all these questions, saw no rhyme or reason in them and despaired. Then, out of the blue, my son Peter asked if I had read A Distant Mirror, by Alison Tuchman. No, I hadn't. Well, he answered, you should.
So I started this marvellous panorama of the 14th century, which centres on the life and family of Enguerrand de Coucy, an influential French knight who seemed to have a finger in every fourteenth- century pie going. And, as I read, I found the solution - a ready-made story with an identifiable historical character as the mysterious follower and a perfect explanation for the purpose of the English lords coming to France to discuss something which concerned them both deeply. And St Ursula? I reread the accounts of the legend - and suddenly her significance in the story was clear. Nothing to do with Roslin Chapel or any other edifice, whether in Scotland, Wales or anywhere-else. The story I wanted - needed - was there, waiting to be found, with proper historical warrant and a provenance I could never have expected, though should have been able to work out for myself.. And also, in Eliot's terms, a complete objective correlative for the whole of the structure of six free-standing novels as part of an overarching story. If I hadn't found it, the whole project would have failed. But also, the fact that I had as little idea as Joslin about what I was in for until it actually 'happened' to me gives the whole sequence any merit in may have.
And here's where it finished.
My next project to do with my own writing, by the way, is to put the whole sequence back into paperback.
Now the question was, would I be able to find a convincing back-story to act as the objective correlative to the events in Hunter's Moon?
It seemed to me that the first thing I needed to do was to run the snake pit to earth. So I googled ‘snake pits in Norse mythology’ and found myself directed to Wikipedia and the information that, in about 865 AD Aella, king of Northumbria, captured his greatest Viking enemy, Ragnar Ladbrok, and had him thrown into a pit full of snakes. King Aella of Northumbria. Who could have guessed that? How perfect for my purposes. And a year afterwards, Ragnar’s sons, Halfdan and Bjorn, brought the great Army of the Heathen over to Northumbria to take revenge for their father and in a huge battle the two armies pretty well destroyed each other. So there we have the haunted battlefield close to Ridley Hall. Yes, I know this is legend. But for my purposes it became true. Except for the fact that Ragnar may have escaped death after all
And
once I had got that, the rest, like the story behind Joslin. came so quickly. They almost seemed to act out James's own title - 'Whistle and I'll come to you.' I whistled and they came. Now I knew the ill boy. His name is
Davy. Yes, he was sent to the school by a wicked stepfather who wants rid of himbut there’s a lot
more to it than that. There is real evil behind this stepfather. Like so much in the story, he is not what he
seems. There’s a back story which involves revenge lasting over the millennia. Aella’s wish for earthly revenge on the (possibly) escaped Ragnar is taken over for their own purposes by the gods
and the jötunn (such as Loki, the shape-shifting mischief-maker). Humans, both
present-day and Viking, gods and jötunn, walk together in our world. Miraculous-seeming events in the synopsis become explicable in terms of Norse mythology. There is narrative logic for Davy’s appearance in Valhalla and a conclusion which, in TS
Eliot’s words, I hope justifies the facts as we have them - the longed-for objective
correlative.
Stairway to Valhalla
Well, perhaps. It might all be a dismal failure and I’ve made a grievous miscalculation. When finished, the story will max out at about 35,000 words, more than Joe wanted. Joe will be the first judge. We’ve worked well so far. Joe has made many extra suggestions, including the idea for one new episode which went straight in to the story and which I think is brilliant. I’ve incorporated them all. I now have a nearly full working copy, complete except for the last two, perhaps three, chapters, which I shall ask Joe to shred to pieces if he thinks fit. So far he’s only had the story in bits to comment on.
The
missing chapters are more or less there in draft but there’s more work to do on
them because they recount big, significant, even extreme, events and they have
to be got right. And I’m still at the stage of thinking, ‘Does this work? Have I
missed a trick? Will my rickety structure fall to pieces as soon as it’s touched?’
Well,
who knows? The whole project is something I never expected to be asked to do. And I’ve found it
sometimes frustrating, sometimes elating, always fascinating and perhaps at the
end I can say I’ve done adequately what I was asked to do.
And all I can say now is that I’ve found the task of trying to bring someone else’s ideas
to fruition very satisfying.
And
humbling too. ‘Tread softly, for you
tread on my dreams.’
Out of the Deep: Stories of the
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Comments
About Ragnar...Something you might be able to use. After Aelle's killed him, he thinks, 'Lumme, what have I done?' So he sends an extremely diplomatic mission to Denmark, to inform Ragnar's three sons of their father's unfortunate accident in the snake pit. The two youngest sons are furious, swearing revenge, blood and fury.
The eldest sits on his father's throne, holding a spear and hears the messenger very calmly, speaking him fair and making some very cool arrangement about blood-payment for their father. (I think it's about a number of hides of English land, which seems a very small payment for a dead father and king.)
After the messenger's gone, the younger sons turn on their elder brother. How could he be so calm, how could he fix such a paltry price?
The eldest son then puts down his spear, revealing that his clenched fingers have bitten deep into the ash-wood shaft. He orders a fort built on his hides of English ground, where he lands his fleet when he brings the Great Danish Army to England. He takes Northumberland (which then included Cumbria) as his blood-price. H intends to take the whole of England, but Alfred happened.
This sounds a terrific story with the Great Unknown still to be revealed... why does someone who has such creative ideas not want to write them down himself?