Is your prologue hook, line or stinker? Ali Bacon considers the chances
Prologues - why not jump right in? |
Let’s think about the nature of the conventional prologue. First of all why is it there?
1)
To
create atmosphere and suspense – my mystery takes a
few chapters to set things up, let’s flag up what's coming or get a bit of creepiness/excitement in at the start.
2)
Because
it’s in a different timeline – if the reader is going to understand the plot
they need to know something that happened a long time before (or possibly
after) the main sequence of events so let’s get it in right at the start (and
if it’s something dramatic so much the better).
3)
Wow
factor – whatever my book is like, I have given it a humdinger of an opening .
Image credit* |
A prologue needs to have impact but not so much as to overshadow everything that comes next. A particular dislike of mine is a prologue where the character carrying the narrative (first person or third) comes to a sticky end. This of course serves up a bucketful of atmosphere and in a detective mystery provides the 'inciting incident'. But excuse me, I’ve just spent several minutes investing in a character who isn’t going to appear again.
I recently encountered this in Sarah Perry’s marvellous, The
Essex Serpent which opens like this:
" A young man walks down by the banks of the Blackwater under a full cold moon...
... the gulls lift off one by one, and the last gives a scream of dismay."
Great writing actually (this is a tiny snippet) but clearly this is not going to end well, equally clearly this not going to be the main character. So why oh why …?
Luckily I persevered because it’s a great book, but I think I would happily have begun with the next chapter where we meet the intriguing Cora and her doctor. She after all is the one who matters
Luckily I persevered because it’s a great book, but I think I would happily have begun with the next chapter where we meet the intriguing Cora and her doctor. She after all is the one who matters
I blame the school of 'show not tell' for the popularity of
prologues. If there’s information we need to impart early on, we don’t have to
tease it out through a whole scene and overlay it with description and drama. My
recent sojourn in the land of short story judging has made me a huge fan of
clarity, of a line of exposition (shock horror!) to set the scene. ‘It was the
summer of 1916’ is so much more refreshing than a paragraph of emotion-infested
weather and a picnic on the lawn. You can have the picnic by the way, just tell
us when and where we are!
But I digress. One good
thing about prologues is that they are short - or shortish. (From which my
cynical self infers the author is worried about holding things up for to long!)
I can also let you into the secret. In the Blink of an Eye had a prologue
( of the ‘flash forward’ variety) which simply grew too long to be a prologue. The longer
it got, the more I saw it wasn’t an adjunct to the book but part of the whole, its keystone in fact. It became the first chapter . It grew some more. The end of it became the last chapter. Dare I say epilogue?!
So can the P word always be avoided? Maybe not, but there’s a
lot to be said for making sure it’s needed and keyed into the narrative rather than something prefatory. Just this week I was at a talk by best-selling thriller writer Gilly MacmiIlan. An audience
member asked her how she knew where to start her stories, to which she replied
she started with the bit that affected her most deeply, even if she had to
‘fiddle with the timeline’.
I can report that the opening of her forthcoming novel, which
she read out, is riveting. I’m pretty
sure it isn’t called ‘prologue’.
Ali Bacon writes contemporary and historical fiction. Her new novel In the Blink of an
Eye, about a Scottish artist who assists with the birth of photography, will be published by Linen Press in 2018.
Ali Bacon writes contemporary and historical fiction. Her new novel In the Blink of an
Eye, about a Scottish artist who assists with the birth of photography, will be published by Linen Press in 2018.
Ali with photographs by Hill and Adamson, subjects of her new book |
*Image credit: By Gustave Dore - Gustave Dore, Public Domain, https://commons.wikimedia.org/w/index.php?curid=47206396
Comments
I sometimes feel the prologue is the bit the author should have cut but didn't have the heart to.
In the Sparrow it's there precisely because the 2 characters who drive it will make no further appearance in the book. After a teasing opening paragraph, I wrote: 'In fact, they’re both mere statistics in this story. Derek is the first of its many casualties. He and Tony just happened to be there when it began, so they deserve their moment of fame before they disappear completely'.
The first chapter of Alternative Dimension (necessarily) carries some expository material so I promoted/demoted a self-contained episode from the body text to prologue to act as a taster of the sort of things that would be happening once the essentials had been established.
I guess that some might say 'If you'd been anything of a writer, you'd have rewritten the "exposition" to make it more hilarious', but they would be failing to take account of my idleness.